Flec's Guidelines On How To Write A Gud Death Scene

by flec, Mar 13, 2021, 6:21 PM

Henlo, it's flec, and I'll be teaching y'all on how to write a good death scene.
Let's start with a few examples!!

The Death of Sun Stream

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So, as you see here, these are all quite descriptive and most likely sad.
Unless you have barely any emotions like me owo.
Anyways, here are a few tips.

1) Be descriptive!
"He died. She cried." This is not descriptive. You need to DESCRIBE HOW he died, and how the others responded! A better example would be, "Blood and life flowed from wounds in his side, and with a last loving look, the life died in his brown eyes."

2) Tears
Blood sweat tears ;). Be sure to add a lot of crying, but instead of uncontrollable sobbing, sometimes just a little is fine. Example: "She could not stop a few silvery tear or two from leaking out of her eyes and falling silently down onto his body."

3) DIAGLOGUEEEEE!!
Be sure to add lots of sweet and sappy dialogue. Some good examples are: "I love you." "I'll be here." "We'll always be together." "Say you won't let go."

4) Setting
Describe the setting. The best settings in a death scene are a moon-lit sky or a dark forest.

5) Heartbreak
Be sure to describe heartbreak! Use words like "pain" "broken" and "gone" to add to the sadness. Examples: "Pain shot into her heart like a poisoned arrow." "Her heart seemed to shatter like a window".

6) Metaphors and similes!
These are the best ways to be descriptive and compare things to real situations. Examples: "Her heart was a stone" "Her heart seemed to shatter like a window" "His tears are the stars."

Anyways, that's it, and if you want you can share some below :3
Hope I helped although it's a weird hobby I have lol
This post has been edited 2 times. Last edited by flec, Jul 27, 2023, 12:21 PM

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OWO flec is a pro good writer :omighty:
I like how in the second example it said “But now, they’d be together. Even if their bodies were far apart, and their living spirits broken.”

Yes, metaphors and similes make death scenes better! :thumbup:

by bingo2016, Mar 13, 2021, 6:40 PM

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okmaam$~$

by tongtong-icy, Mar 13, 2021, 6:44 PM

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Thanks for the writing class but I already have a writing tutor :)

by ilovepizza2020, Mar 13, 2021, 6:55 PM

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oh wow very nice flec

by v4913, Mar 13, 2021, 7:27 PM

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:o amazinggggg

by kavya.rajesh, Mar 13, 2021, 7:38 PM

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I think I can write a worse ending but its gonna be bad

by szheng0312, Mar 13, 2021, 8:41 PM

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yay thanks :3

by flec, Mar 13, 2021, 9:10 PM

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wao pr0 advice

by bubbletea070821, Mar 13, 2021, 10:03 PM

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I can't write anything other than poems and research papers LOLLL

by MrVancoover, Mar 13, 2021, 10:28 PM

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join the Erin hunter team

by jxc516, Mar 14, 2021, 12:06 AM

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pr0 flec gives pr0 tips

I'm probably the worst person to write tragedies cuz I'm bad at writing

by LucBob, Mar 14, 2021, 12:20 AM

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jxc yis that's my dream XD

by flec, Mar 14, 2021, 12:40 AM

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I'm not good at creating tragedy stories, but I am ok at making sad music

And yes... my writing stinks

by LucBob, Mar 14, 2021, 1:19 AM

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